With the completion of the first draft, which means a fully written out story in script form, I have that wonderful sense of getting my first hit in baseball. But with rounding the bases that sense of coming home crystallizes in my mind as the end goal. Like I said in my last post, I had got new ideas from various sources, namely my "regular" friend's comments.
Risks! I also took a big step in a character's development. I placed "Bobby the Blade," a main character, in the past with our lead character "Mad Devil Kent." I knew this move would affect the entire story, so I also had to re trace steps in the story line to make sure it was the right fit. It works, but I know like that first cup of coffee in the morning, it wasn't fully awake.
So I sent the script out to the producer and a select few of film professionals. Wow, I got back gold. I told myself at this point it's important to practice detachment at this stage. Once I share "my baby," with the world, it's no longer mine. I don't feel a need to defend my work but I'm so amazed by the feed back and unique perspectives that people saw when reading my work. That for me is a test of artistic maturity and a thrill!
In rounding first to second, I needed to make some clear decisions. Do I slide into second or stretch it out? Here with the second draft I went for the extra base. Not only did I make new choices for the story, like the afore mentioned Bobby move, but I tighten the script by cutting out scenes and dialogue that did not help move along the story. Again if I just want to hear the sound of my writing, then cool, keep it all in, even if nothing really new happens in the scenes.
Another note I got was that it's a very violent story. Yes it is! So I better make sure that the violence in this tale has purpose and beauty. There is meaning in all things, especially in the ancient code of honor in martial arts or Budo. To balance this, I added music during intense fight scenes, that are in congruent to the action at hand. But more importantly deeply connected to the lead characters. Example, is the song "Sakura I" in music box version, has ancient and family ties to Kimiko that she addresses in the scene prior to a fight. Its a huge motif for me. Finding that beauty in the violence, the peace of mind in the many struggles of a violent world.
Now next phase, further tightening of the script and hiring the camera crew to bring this vision alive! Here here is a great visual inspiration by Robert Rowland, filmmaker and martial artist.